I enjoyed reading your story about your dog. My daughter, Kendal just got her first puppy for Christmas. His name is Ranger and he is a MESS! He loves to go outside and run around....and get dirty :(. Thanks for sharing your fun experience about your dog.
Your dialogue was EXCELLENT!!! Reminds me of my dog. He runs away a lot. He's the fastest dog I've ever seen! He ran to Hulen once. We had to chase him. It made it harder knowing my mom was pregnant!!!
it was awesome when you told about when you slowly walked to the abanded house and you heared two dogs grouling and fighting over a bone!also,your revising was FANTASTIC!!!!
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ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading your story about your dog. My daughter, Kendal just got her first puppy for Christmas. His name is Ranger and he is a MESS! He loves to go outside and run around....and get dirty :(. Thanks for sharing your fun experience about your dog.
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ReplyDeleteYour dialogue was EXCELLENT!!!
ReplyDeleteReminds me of my dog. He runs away a lot. He's the fastest dog I've ever seen! He ran to Hulen once. We had to chase him. It made it harder knowing my mom was pregnant!!!
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ReplyDeleteit was awesome when you told about when you slowly walked to the abanded house and you heared two dogs grouling and fighting over a bone!also,your revising was FANTASTIC!!!!
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