Sunday, April 1, 2012

Featured Author: Hunter (click here)

My first featured author today is Hunter.  He was writing a story about a time in a new place or situation.  As you all know, Texas Rangers stories make a strong connection with me because I can remember my first game as a kid. 

In the future, Hunter will organize his writing into paragraphs and squeeze these short stories into one page.  I also spoke to Hunter about focusing on the main idea of his story.  He used wonderful words to describe his experience, but I encourage Hunter to focus his writing on his most important details and events.





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34 comments:

  1. alissaFebruary 23, 2012 at 6:10 PM

    YOUR STORY WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  2. alissaFebruary 23, 2012 at 6:12 PM

    I LOVED THE YOU WROTE THE FANS ALMOST BROKE YOUR EAR DRUMS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  3. alissaFebruary 23, 2012 at 6:14 PM

    I LIKED YOUR CONCLUSION.

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  4. adam's momFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:44 PM

    i like your writing and great job with the ending!!!!!!!!!!!

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  5. adamFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:47 PM

    i like how you hooked your reader and nice drafting BRO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  6. salmaFebruary 24, 2012 at 7:29 AM

    I loved your heart...I loved the part when you said that broke you ear drums!!!!!!!!!!

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  7. sonataFebruary 24, 2012 at 2:43 PM

    Great word choice!!!!

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  8. Ryan R.February 24, 2012 at 3:49 PM

    Awesome writer's voice Hunter.

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    1. aprilFebruary 25, 2012 at 9:14 AM

      i felt like i was there great handwriting to my neice wanted to hear more of your story

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  9. LilyFebruary 25, 2012 at 10:30 AM

    I liked the part where you said "your seats were in the nosebleed section".Your story was a perfect 4.

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  10. JavierFebruary 27, 2012 at 9:48 AM

    You blew my mind with that story of yours!

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  11. adamFebruary 27, 2012 at 1:04 PM

    i like wane you said that you love the yells!! and you hook me in the story

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  12. NicholasFebruary 27, 2012 at 1:07 PM

    Great story hunter

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  13. abrahamFebruary 27, 2012 at 2:31 PM

    Hunter great hart!!!!!

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  14. tristanFebruary 28, 2012 at 3:49 PM

    Great job on show not tell

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  15. michelFebruary 28, 2012 at 9:13 PM

    HUNTER I love you spoke MY dad dashed in steat of ran.

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  16. AnelFebruary 29, 2012 at 10:25 AM

    I LOOOVVVVVEEEEEDDDDDD HOW YOU USED DETAILS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  17. jenniferFebruary 29, 2012 at 2:29 PM

    your story was great and i liked the way you used an exclamation point!! :)

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  18. AndreFebruary 29, 2012 at 2:55 PM

    "Nice word choice and awesome intro and conclusion".

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    1. hunterMarch 5, 2012 at 9:11 PM

      thank you so much andre i will keep doing that.

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  19. joelFebruary 29, 2012 at 7:53 PM

    You had a great since of humor.

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  20. alissaMarch 1, 2012 at 8:50 AM

    YOUR DIOLAUGE WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  21. alissaMarch 1, 2012 at 8:53 AM

    YOUR WRITERS VOICE WAS FABULOUS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  22. DianaMarch 1, 2012 at 9:24 AM

    I love how you did show not tell!!!!!!!!!

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  23. jainaMarch 1, 2012 at 2:02 PM

    Hunter your story is awesome

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  24. maxMarch 1, 2012 at 3:00 PM

    i loved how you put as green as a crayon

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    1. hunterMarch 5, 2012 at 9:14 PM

      thinks i thought it would be great to

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    2. BrendonFebruary 20, 2013 at 3:38 PM

      I agree max!!!!!!!!!!!!! :)

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  25. NatalieMarch 6, 2012 at 10:28 AM

    I felt like I was in there.I liked how you used show not tell!!!!!!!!!

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  26. ELIMarch 26, 2012 at 9:34 AM

    I LOOOOOOVVVVVVEEEEEED HOWED YOU DESCRIBE THE STADIUM LOOK LIKE.

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  27. CaitlinFebruary 18, 2013 at 1:36 PM

    I liked how you had told me how your dad dashed in the house!!

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  28. BrendonFebruary 20, 2013 at 3:37 PM

    I loved how you described the stadium!!!! :)

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  29. Sienna H.February 20, 2013 at 7:23 PM

    I loved it!! What would make the story just a little bit better is the title. Be more descriptive instead of The First Time Going you could try A Trip To The Stadium... The rest was great I'm not trying to hurt your feelings but it could be a little bit better. :)

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