Thursday, March 1, 2012

Featured Author: Oscar (click here)

Oscar composed an entertaining story with a wonderful message about a time things did not go the way he planned.  Notice the strategy he used to organize his paper into paragraphs. 

There are a couple small mistakes made with quotation marks.  Pretend you are editing this paper, and see if you can spot them. 






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28 comments:

  1. alissaMarch 2, 2012 at 7:55 AM

    I LOVED YOUR CONCLUSION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  2. SalmaMarch 2, 2012 at 8:35 AM

    I loved your story it hooked me up !!!!!!!!!!I would want that phone......

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  3. DianaMarch 2, 2012 at 8:47 AM

    I like how you told your parents "what is this ugly thing"!!!!!!

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  4. TIMMIAMarch 2, 2012 at 9:11 AM

    I love the way you wanted to get a iphone4s. I love your handwriting and you were really excited about getting an iphone4s.AND your parents sound really special because they love you more then anything.BUT it sounds really funny how you kept on bugging people allot about the iphone4s!!!!!! because you were getting your first iphone4s ever, and it sounds like you were in good luck because you did so good on your report card!!!!!! and your parents promised that you would get an iphone4s if you did good on your report card

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  5. AlexandraMarch 2, 2012 at 9:28 AM

    I LOVE your heart and the part when you stated I was going to break the window,TV,door.

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  6. SandraMarch 2, 2012 at 9:37 AM

    I how you use dialogue, and i liked your show not tell!!!

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  7. MAXMarch 2, 2012 at 2:07 PM

    I Liked How You Put In Dialouge What Is This Ugly Thing.

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  8. AndreMarch 2, 2012 at 2:11 PM

    Your story was funny and cool.I like how you said that you were going to break the window,TV,and door because you were angry.It was funny how you explained that you were going to throw up on your phone.

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  9. JoelMarch 2, 2012 at 2:40 PM

    I enjoy that you actually said you were bragging to everyone. A lot of people wouldn't admit that. Nice job. I really enjoyed that story. Can't wait to see more!!!

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  10. JainaMarch 2, 2012 at 2:53 PM

    Oscar your story is awesome.

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  11. sonataMarch 2, 2012 at 5:38 PM

    Awsome intro and heart/conclusion

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  12. NatalieMarch 3, 2012 at 6:12 PM

    I really liked your heart .When you said they cared about you

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  13. ashantiMarch 5, 2012 at 7:52 PM

    I love your heart

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  14. AleeyarMarch 6, 2012 at 10:15 AM

    your topic was great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  15. Ryan PMarch 7, 2012 at 12:13 PM

    Hi Oscar I love your story.

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    1. Ryan P.March 26, 2012 at 10:43 AM

      Oscar I love your story I punctuation and grammar and periods

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  16. jennyMarch 26, 2012 at 9:23 AM

    I loved the way you respouned to your mom "what is this ugly thing"lloovveedd it 030

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  17. IvanMarch 26, 2012 at 12:09 PM

    I like how you put your period in the right place

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  18. JainaMarch 26, 2012 at 1:55 PM

    Oscar before your story ends I like the part when you told your mom what was that ugly thing.

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  19. *kailey*March 26, 2012 at 2:09 PM

    oscar your story made me laugh twice.The first time was when you said you wanted to throw up on it.The second time is when your mother said "you watch your mouth young man."

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  20. TinaMarch 26, 2012 at 2:37 PM

    I love your story it hooked me to every word!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  21. Tina=)March 26, 2012 at 2:42 PM

    Iloved your story it hooked me to every word

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  22. mariahMarch 28, 2012 at 2:24 PM

    I Like how you told what kind of phone it was

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  23. MariahMarch 29, 2012 at 5:36 PM

    I like how you leared your lesson what kind of phone you was getting.

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  24. DANIELLE FRIENDMarch 30, 2012 at 9:19 AM

    I LIKE YOUR INTRODUCTION AND CONCLUSION.

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  25. mariahApril 3, 2012 at 8:36 AM

    I like how your mom told you watch your mouth.

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