Sunday, April 1, 2012

Featured Author: April (click here)

April wrote a fun story about her adventures in babysitting.  Her word choice lets me picture all the crazy things she saw that day.  I wish April would have spent a few more sentences telling us about the hilarious things the kids were doing.  Exciting supporting details always make a story more fun! 

April, great message in your conclusion!




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23 comments:

  1. I love your introduction

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  2. YOUR STORY WAS AMAZINGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  3. Your middle was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  4. Once I had to take care of my little sister.Any way great story!!!!!!!!!!!

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  5. WOW! april your story was so...... funny i love your word choice.You have a great voice

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  6. I like the part when they were going all over the place!!!!!!!!

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  7. Your story reminds me of the time I had to take care of my little brothers.Awesome story April keep on writing:)

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  8. I loved your story it was AMAZING!!! i liked how you used dialogue at the beggining

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  9. April I love your story.

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  10. Your heart had A great meaning!

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  11. aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaazzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzziiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnngggggggggggggggggggggggg, story! i love your conclusion, it was so meaningful it made my storylook horrible comepared to mine! AWESOME!

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  13. i can't describe how i loved your conclusion i mean although they drive you nuts i'm astonished.

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  14. Your story made me feel glad that I'm not old enough to babysit! AWESOME STORY!!

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  15. I loved how you were thoughtful enough to babysit for your sister it really wrapped the story up and made the story meaningful .
    nice!!!!!

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  16. I love this story it was amazing

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  17. I LOVED your conclusion !! It was awesome blossom ! You have terrific dialog!

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  18. I loved how you wrote your conclusion!! It was awesome!!!!:)

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  19. I LOVED CONCLUSION!!!!!!!.

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  20. I like you story because even know you're niece and nephew are a pain you were happy because you helped sister.I also like how you care for you're sister.

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