Thursday, February 23, 2012

Featured Author: Alissa (click here)

My second featured author today is Alissa.  She wrote a very encouraging story about solving a problem.  Alissa is a huge fan of soccer and can always tell you an interesting story about her favorite sport.  Read below and see if you can identify the important message she wants us to take away as we read her paper.

Alissa is working to organize her stories into paragraphs and use indentions to begin her new paragraphs.  ( For more information on indentions, please see Javier's story )




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  1. Alissa's grandmotherFebruary 23, 2012 at 8:06 PM

    Alissa I'm glad that you did't gave up on that trick, becouse in the long run you made that GOALLLLL!!!!!!! congrats KEEP ON WRITING.

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  2. salmaFebruary 24, 2012 at 7:20 AM

    You made me fell like I was thier at the game........

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  3. Ryan R.February 24, 2012 at 3:42 PM

    Nice hand writing Alissa.

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  4. sonataFebruary 24, 2012 at 5:34 PM

    Awsome heart and dialogoe

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  5. victoriaFebruary 24, 2012 at 5:52 PM

    nice really good just try to work on that handwriting!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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    1. aprilFebruary 25, 2012 at 9:09 AM

      my niece loved the topic i loved how i felt like i was there

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  6. LilyFebruary 25, 2012 at 10:33 AM

    Alissa your story was perfect!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  7. manuelFebruary 26, 2012 at 8:46 PM

    Your story felt like I was in your story

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  8. TAYLORFebruary 27, 2012 at 9:27 AM

    I loved your story it was FANTASTIC! You have a SUPER! writers voice.

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  9. equirraFebruary 27, 2012 at 9:30 AM

    your conclusion was amazing!!!!!and u wrap up your story meaningful and exciting.your intro was amazing to because you ask a question and you use dialogue when you where speaking and when you stop speaking. I love when you use a lesson to learn at the end of your story.

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    1. alissaFebruary 27, 2012 at 5:57 PM

      Thanks Everyone!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  10. AleeyarFebruary 28, 2012 at 1:49 PM

    your middle was cool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  11. Thian $February 28, 2012 at 2:03 PM

    I like your handwrite $--->>>>>>>>>

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  12. AnelFebruary 29, 2012 at 10:34 AM

    Your ending was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  13. kaileyFebruary 29, 2012 at 2:29 PM

    alissa when you announced your back might be broken it reminded me of a grandma or grandpa saying "my backs stuck!"

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    1. alissaFebruary 29, 2012 at 8:28 PM

      I agree on all of u guysss!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  14. joelFebruary 29, 2012 at 7:56 PM

    You had a strong conclusion (heart).

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    1. alissaMarch 1, 2012 at 8:44 AM

      THANK YOU !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  15. DianaMarch 1, 2012 at 9:21 AM

    I love your heart!!!!!!!Keep on writing!!!!(:

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  16. alissaMarch 2, 2012 at 8:00 AM

    Alissa your story was AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  17. MAXMarch 2, 2012 at 2:14 PM

    I LOVE YOUR TOPIC SOCCER IS THE BEST!I Also Loved Your Conclusion.

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  18. alissaMarch 5, 2012 at 8:11 PM

    YOUR HEART WAS THE GREATEST STORY I EVER READ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  19. NatalieMarch 6, 2012 at 10:22 AM

    That story blew me away!!!!!!!!.Keep it up Alissa[:

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  20. DianaMarch 7, 2012 at 11:49 AM

    You have very nice handwriting!!I also like your introduction and your conclusion.!!

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  21. sandraMarch 7, 2012 at 3:52 PM

    I loved the dialogue at the beginning. I also loved at the end when you said that wonderful skills takes hard work.:)

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  22. Andrew 5thMarch 8, 2012 at 5:09 PM

    I liked all of these stories and I think that everyone is striving and doing their BEST in writing class. Thank you!!!!

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  23. JainaMarch 26, 2012 at 2:10 PM

    I like when you put the I LEARN in your story because it help the people to think about it.

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  24. AndreMarch 26, 2012 at 2:40 PM

    Your heart was very great to your story and I loved your story mainly because I love soccer too.

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  25. Anna C.February 18, 2013 at 5:39 PM

    Your story is totally AWESOME!! It's packed with detail! (P.S. we read the bucking bull story today!

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  26. Anna C.February 18, 2013 at 5:43 PM

    I love your conclusion!! It is AWESOME!!

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  27. BLUFebruary 25, 2013 at 7:09 PM

    I like how u used your word choice.

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