Saturday, February 18, 2012

Featured Author: Sandra (click here)

Sandra was asked to write about a time she was in a new place or situation and explain how she reacted.  She worked hard and wrote a great story about the first day at a new school.  The heart of her story is something many us can make a connection to.  Sandra and I discussed dividing her future writing into paragraphs to provide clarity to the reader.  I included her pre-writing because Sandra has a very unique way of using a word web.






Below, Sandra planed her story using a double topic T-chart.  She determined her topic, problem, and heart before she drafted her story.



Sandra is a wonderful artist!  It is no surprise to me that her pre-writing is done in such a creative way.  The middle of the flower is her central idea, and each petal contains ideas that she wants to include in her story.



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66 comments:

  1. sonataFebruary 18, 2012 at 5:17 PM

    Your dialouge was extrodiary!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  2. Kristin (Mr. Adams' Wife)February 18, 2012 at 7:10 PM

    Your pre-writing flower was such an amazing idea! Also, I really enjoyed how your described your stomach as a washing machine. You are so creative!

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  3. sonata's auntFebruary 18, 2012 at 10:04 PM

    YOUR dialogue was amazing!!!!

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  4. Mrs. KelleyFebruary 18, 2012 at 10:13 PM

    I liked the way you organized your ideas and the heart of your story.

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  5. joelFebruary 18, 2012 at 10:18 PM

    I enjoyed your vocabulary!!! Can't wait to see some more of your stories! Have a great day.

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  6. APRILFebruary 19, 2012 at 9:47 AM

    I LOVED YOUR PUNCITON AND THE PART ABOUT HOW YOU DISCRIBED YOUR STONCH AS A WASHING MASHINE

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  7. LilyFebruary 19, 2012 at 12:03 PM

    Very nice, descriptive details. I like the way you stayed on topic the whole time.

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  8. adrianaFebruary 19, 2012 at 7:35 PM

    I loved how you first felt scared but then you realized it wasn't so bad and ended up having a Bff.I also liked when you started with dialogue.

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  9. danielFebruary 19, 2012 at 7:43 PM

    Your story was awesome!!!

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  10. salmaFebruary 20, 2012 at 8:34 AM

    I loved when you felt you had a washing machine inside your stomach.

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  11. jennyFebruary 20, 2012 at 7:05 PM

    Sandra I LOVED the way you where scare when i came back to school I was scare that I wasn't going to make any friend too but that friend was you.^3^

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  12. elizabethFebruary 20, 2012 at 7:20 PM

    I loved your story!!! I also liked at the beginning when you were scared and ended up being happy.

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  13. sandra's momFebruary 20, 2012 at 7:32 PM

    I loved your dialogue it was awesome!!! i also loved your story.

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  14. sandra's dadFebruary 20, 2012 at 7:36 PM

    I really enjoyed your story.I loved the dialogue at the beginning!!!!!!!!!!!

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  15. aleeyarFebruary 21, 2012 at 2:05 PM

    Your ending was awesome

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  16. NatalieFebruary 21, 2012 at 3:57 PM

    I relly liked your word choice and your ending great story.

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  17. alissaFebruary 21, 2012 at 5:59 PM

    I really loved your heart of your story

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  18. ivanFebruary 21, 2012 at 8:32 PM

    sandra i like your t-chart

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  19. eliFebruary 22, 2012 at 8:47 AM

    sandra i like your word choice

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  20. DanielleFebruary 22, 2012 at 8:48 AM

    I love when you described how you felt.

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  21. DianaFebruary 22, 2012 at 4:52 PM

    Sandra I love your show not tell.I alse love the way you discribed how you felt.

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  22. NatalieFebruary 22, 2012 at 6:32 PM

    I liked how you did your flower.A put the events in oder.

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  23. AprilFebruary 23, 2012 at 8:48 AM

    wonderful word flower! I love how you made me see it in my mind it felt like i was there!

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  24. AlexandraFebruary 23, 2012 at 8:53 AM

    I LOVE your dialog

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  25. JavierFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:27 AM

    I like the way how you were begging you mom "Please,Please,Please."
    That was AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!

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  26. DianaFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:40 AM

    I <3 your story Sandra!!!!!!!!!!Your story HOOKED me up!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  27. eliFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:46 AM

    I LOVE YOUR FLOWER

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  28. alissaFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:47 AM

    Your diolauge is magnifecent

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  29. eliFebruary 23, 2012 at 9:49 AM

    i love your double trouble T-chart

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  30. adamFebruary 23, 2012 at 11:05 AM

    i like wane you yelled! that some one is pounding
    you.

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  31. JainaFebruary 23, 2012 at 2:29 PM

    Sandra that was a exciting story

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  32. salmaFebruary 23, 2012 at 5:54 PM

    I like you double trouble T-chart

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  33. alissaFebruary 23, 2012 at 6:05 PM

    Your flower buble map was amazing!

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  34. felicityFebruary 24, 2012 at 11:47 AM

    i love your double trouble t-chart

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  35. ADAMFebruary 24, 2012 at 8:41 PM

    that was a great story,i wish i could hear more.i liked your punctuation to!!!!

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  36. EquirraFebruary 27, 2012 at 9:39 AM

    your story was excellent because you use dialogue and you describe the way the teacher looked

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  37. TinaFebruary 27, 2012 at 2:34 PM

    i loved your story, not because your my friend because your a great writer!

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  38. AleeyarFebruary 28, 2012 at 1:46 PM

    your flower was awesome.

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  39. tristanFebruary 28, 2012 at 4:00 PM

    I like how you exclaim it feel like theres a washing machine inside of you!

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  40. DiegoFebruary 29, 2012 at 10:34 AM

    I like how you show not tell.

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  41. timmiaMarch 2, 2012 at 8:36 AM

    I love how you and TAYLOR became friends and i love how your hand writing was

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  42. EQUIRRAMarch 2, 2012 at 9:26 AM

    I LIKE YOUR STORY BECAUSE YO U USE SOME OF YOUR SCENES,AND THE WAY YOU USE DESCRIPTIVE WORDS

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  43. ivanMarch 2, 2012 at 1:04 PM

    I like your double trouble [;

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  44. luisMarch 2, 2012 at 1:56 PM

    I really like how you said that your stomach felt like a washing machine I really liked that

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  45. ashantiMarch 2, 2012 at 2:51 PM

    your story blew my mind

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  46. AngelMarch 5, 2012 at 12:03 PM

    Sandra I like when you said that your stomach felt like a washing machine.

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  47. lauraMarch 7, 2012 at 3:59 PM

    Your story was great.i like how you described your stomach as a washing machine!!! ;)

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  48. sandra'grandmotherMarch 7, 2012 at 4:01 PM

    i loved your story!!!Keep on writing!

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  49. sandra's grandfatherMarch 7, 2012 at 4:04 PM

    I liked how you use dialogue.I your show not tell.

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  50. sandra's auntMarch 7, 2012 at 4:11 PM

    I liked your show not tell.I also liked at the end when you include the heart of your story

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  51. sandra's uncleMarch 7, 2012 at 4:13 PM

    I loved your dialogue. I also liked your show not tell.

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  52. kaileyMarch 8, 2012 at 2:51 PM

    I just loved your word choice like when you stated your stomach felt like a washing machine.

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  53. CHRISTIANMarch 8, 2012 at 2:58 PM

    LOVE HOW YOU EXCLAIMED TO MR.ADAMS "YES I WANT YOU TO PUT THIS STORY ON THE B.L.O.G MR.ADAMS" Also
    that was very brave of you saying yes put it on the b.l.o.g Mr.Adams.

    PS A.W.E.S.O.M.E!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  54. jennyMarch 26, 2012 at 9:38 AM

    you make me feel like am there with you now ^3^P.S loved story a lot ;3

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  55. EdrickMarch 26, 2012 at 11:08 AM

    I like how you wrote your title and how you draw

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  56. mariahMay 7, 2012 at 2:26 PM

    Sandra I like when you yelled please 3 times that how I felt leaveing my old school's. I felt that a butterfly went down my throat and I swolled it but the most important part is that the body support the head.when I left my first school I felt mad that I wanted to throw a vase at wall and out the window because we had 2 vases.Well now I know that school is important I can alwas can come to your story and learn from that story and I like how you put the lesson learn.I was at my old school from prek-to forth grade for a little until I move to different school's.Do you ever remember your first teacher?I still do.

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  57. KimiyaFebruary 8, 2013 at 4:53 PM

    I love how you did your flower t-chart.

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  58. Anna C.February 18, 2013 at 6:01 PM

    Your story was a lot more than amazing!!

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  59. Anna C.February 18, 2013 at 6:06 PM

    I totally agree with Kimiya!!

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  60. Grace C.February 19, 2013 at 10:53 AM

    I love how you did your flower t-chart. It's really pretty! I know that feeling of being at a new school!

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  61. cassandraFebruary 21, 2013 at 9:27 AM

    i liked your prewriting idea your story was awesome i agree with everyone :)

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  62. kimiMay 3, 2013 at 4:35 PM

    i totally agree with Anna c. and grace! your story rocks even if i don't know who you are.

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  63. Sandra Brene in 6th gradeOctober 24, 2013 at 9:42 PM

    thank you all!!!

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