Detective Brave J.J. and the Case of the Stolen Diamond is the first story in an action packed series about a young, brave detective that fights crimes. I know I CAN"T wait for the next story!
The next story is about the old mysterious house that used to belong to Mr. Jenkins. Depsite all the warning signs, for some reason my students keep visiting this haunting place. They all live to share their own unique scary tale.
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The story was fantastic! I loved the BOLTED and
ReplyDeletethe HIGHTAILED words.AWESOME!
BOLTED and HIGHTAILED showed so much suspense and action!
DeleteTo me this story was SPOOOOOKY! How did you know
ReplyDeletewhere everything is?AWESOME!
I really enjoyed all your descriptive details. They made your story very exciting! The end of your Mr. Jenkins story made me laugh out loud :)
ReplyDeleteIt made me laugh out loud to
DeleteI love when you said am not scared of you old man that made me laugh out loud!!!!!!
DeleteJacoryain, I liked your story about Mr. Jenkins. Your ending was very entertaining.
ReplyDeleteYeah! The ending of Mr.jenkins story was HILARIOUSE!!!
ReplyDeleteThis story sucked me in so much that i was reading this out loud in amazement!!! My family thought I was crazy and didn't realize I was reading this amazing story. Can't wait to see more stories. Have a great day. P.S. I am posting comments late at night because the baby woke me up, so I thought I might go ahead and post comments while i'm up :)
ReplyDeleteI LOVED YOUR TOPIC IT WAS INTRESTING
ReplyDeleteYour conclusion on your first story was very interesting. Your second story's conclusion was also amazing. I like the part when you saw Mr. Jenkins' wrinkled face on your football.
ReplyDeletei loved the words BOLTED and HIGHTAILED!!!!!!!!!!!your story was awesome!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI LOVED your story it was just like a suspense movie and i felt I was in it.
ReplyDeletei love your story how you said im not scared of you old man i love it made me laugh.
ReplyDeleteI Love your story how you exclaimed what Happened I felted like I was in the story.
ReplyDeleteI loved your supporting details
ReplyDeleteGogo gaga I love when you announced Mr.Jenkins' winking at you in your football it made me think about the anouing orenge >:DP.S loved the story owo.
ReplyDeleteI like the way you wrote there was a face in your football.
DeleteI love the way you discribed Mr.jenkins' wrinkly face on your football.
ReplyDeleteI love the first story? I like your word chioce like bolted to the back door.
ReplyDeleteI loved how i felt like i was there! favbulas job on the mrjeankins face on your football
ReplyDeleteI like how you didn't used died words. And your handwriting.
ReplyDeleteMe too!To me, its hard to not write death words. Just FOR me.
DeleteI like how you use punctuation and your spelling was perfect!
ReplyDeleteI like how you used punctuations
DeleteJacoryain,that was great! It gave me the goosebumps
DeleteI like the was you replied he cied
ReplyDeleteyour story sounded spooky.When i read it i feel like it's happening to me.I liked the way you described Mr.jenkins.He is ugly!
ReplyDeleteJacoryain this was a terrfic story
ReplyDeleteI cant wait for part 2
ReplyDeleteFun and action pact
ReplyDeleteJacoryain I love you Mr.Jenkin's story!!!!!!These story felt like I was in it....
ReplyDeletecool hunted house story
ReplyDeletefun and action pact
ReplyDeletei want to know what the theif is
ReplyDeletewhat is going to happen next!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI love when you said your basement felt like a secret laboratory.
ReplyDeletemy niece loved the part about his face on the foot ball
DeleteI like your Mr Jenkins story because add a little mystery to it
ReplyDeleteI like how you use a creaturely voice in Mr.Jenkins story
ReplyDeleteI like the ending because it was mysterious
ReplyDeleteI love when you spoke are you scared of me now.
ReplyDeleteI like your whole story!! mostly the part were you found out the thief and when you yelled are you scared of me now
ReplyDeletewhat happens next on the detective JJ story. I want to find out who did it . Your Mr. Jinkins story freaked me out on the part when his face appeared in the ball.
ReplyDeleteWhy did you stop I NEED MORE!
ReplyDeleteI know what mean when you write a story you don't want to stop you want to keep going thats what a good story is about
ReplyDeleteYour right sis because I love writeing and Mr.Adam teach us about writring he help us learn how become a writer.He is an awsome writing.Thank you for being a writing teacher.
DeleteI can allreddy see his face on your foot ball
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How did you come up with your title
ReplyDeleteon the mr.jenkis i love how you told use how you heard foot stepes be hind you i just loved it
ReplyDeletei loved wene you slash to the window
ReplyDeleteI love detective JJ because you really hook your reader
ReplyDeleteI love the way you used dialogue in your story, and I can't wait until part 2.
ReplyDeleteI can't wait until part 2!!
ReplyDeleteI want a part 2 on Detective J.J.! It was so interesting!!
ReplyDeleteThats what i was going to say!!!!!! You really need to!
DeleteI like your introduction and your conclusion.
ReplyDeletei like your story but were is part two? that was a good story because you said he took the taxi
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you were chasing the thief around town and finally you caught him
ReplyDeleteYour story of Mr Jenkins was awesome because its like watching a scary movie because every door wouldent open
ReplyDeleteI like how you replied to Mr Jenkins I am not scared of you.
ReplyDeleteI need part two!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI need part two also.
DeleteWhere is part two?????????????
ReplyDeleteHey wheres part 2
ReplyDeleteSome how the story made my tummy feel funny!ANd can you make part two because i like to read the whole story not: TO be Coutine
ReplyDeleteI'M WAITING FOR PART 2!!!
ReplyDeleteWho was the thief? Scooby Doo or Mr.Adams? :] :] :]
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