I loved how you gave advice about what to do if you you are getting bullied.And and i love the way you told us how to stand up to yourself and tell the bully how you feel. :) :} :>
I like how you tell people to not be scared and stand up for yourself it really wraps the story up and make it more meaningful for people to read.GREAT story!!!!!!
I love how you want people to stop bulling. you could really make a difference in the world. also the story felt alive like i was there.make sure you keep rolling like a rock star.it was great i loved it.
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YOUR WORD CHOICE WAS AMAZING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteYour handwriting was awesome. I can see it really smooth...............
ReplyDeletei love how you have spaces in your paper it makes it clear to read and i love your handwriting
ReplyDeleteloved how you talk about bulling is wronge *3*
ReplyDeletewow! your a great writer i love how express things.About what you should do if you were bullied your a great writer love your story!
ReplyDeleteI couid relly relate to your stoy Lily.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you explained what to do if your being bullied.
ReplyDeleteI LIKE HOW YOU USE YOUR CAPIAL LATTERS AND PUNKUWAYTION
ReplyDeleteI like your story it was amazing
ReplyDeleteI like your word choice.
ReplyDeleteGreat story Lily I would give it a 3 or a 3+.
ReplyDeleteI loved how you gave advice about what to do if you you are getting bullied.And and i love the way you told us how to stand up to yourself and tell the bully how you feel. :) :} :>
ReplyDeleteI enjoy how you realy sound eager to persuade people about bulling because it might let someone (maybe a bully) know how bad it is.
ReplyDeleteI love your factual information.It was facted packed!
ReplyDeleteYou made me hooked to your story and every word.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI loved your word choice
ReplyDeleteilove your story lily it was great
ReplyDeleteI like how talk straight to the reader.
ReplyDeleteI like how you put your big words
ReplyDeleteYou know what?That was the best story I have ever herd!!!!!!!!!!!!Also awesome handwriting.
ReplyDeleteI loved your handwriting it was so nice!!! I also liked the part you said that bullies are cowards.
ReplyDeleteI was so amazed when I read your story,,and I liked how you were talking about bullies you are so right......
ReplyDeleteI loved how you stand up to yourself and others. know I feel like I can do anything that I am to scared to do.
ReplyDeleteLily you are an amaz story writer i was HOCKED i ashanti is proud to say i look up to u
ReplyDeleteMan it's awesome that you care about the people that are getting bullied. Your like a caring parent.
ReplyDeleteGreat job, Lily! When I read the part when you wrote bullies are cowards, it really made me laugh! Really! It did!
ReplyDeleteI like how you tell people to not be scared and stand up for yourself it really wraps the story up and make it more meaningful for people to read.GREAT story!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI love how you want people to stop bulling. you could really make a difference in the world. also the story felt alive like i was there.make sure you keep rolling like a rock star.it was great i loved it.
ReplyDeleteI like your authors voice!! That is nice you care about people getting bullied these days!!! AWSOME!!!!
ReplyDeleteI love how you care about people getting bullied !!! You chose a great topic !!! TERRIFIC !!!
ReplyDeleteKatherine i think you care about people when you say that.
DeleteI love your story about not bulling. love it.
ReplyDeleteI rely loved your word chioce. I can rely see your reading.
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