Sunday, April 1, 2012

Featured Author: April (click here)

April wrote a fun story about her adventures in babysitting.  Her word choice lets me picture all the crazy things she saw that day.  I wish April would have spent a few more sentences telling us about the hilarious things the kids were doing.  Exciting supporting details always make a story more fun! 

April, great message in your conclusion!




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23 comments:

  1. ashantiMarch 5, 2012 at 7:59 PM

    I love your introduction

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  2. alissaMarch 5, 2012 at 8:04 PM

    YOUR STORY WAS AMAZINGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  3. AleeyarMarch 6, 2012 at 10:12 AM

    Your middle was awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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  4. NatalieMarch 6, 2012 at 10:14 AM

    Once I had to take care of my little sister.Any way great story!!!!!!!!!!!

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  5. TaylorMarch 6, 2012 at 10:32 AM

    WOW! april your story was so...... funny i love your word choice.You have a great voice

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  6. sonataMarch 6, 2012 at 5:03 PM

    I like the part when they were going all over the place!!!!!!!!

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  7. DianaMarch 7, 2012 at 11:31 AM

    Your story reminds me of the time I had to take care of my little brothers.Awesome story April keep on writing:)

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  8. sandraMarch 7, 2012 at 3:45 PM

    I loved your story it was AMAZING!!! i liked how you used dialogue at the beggining

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  9. JainaMarch 8, 2012 at 2:39 PM

    April I love your story.

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  10. joelMarch 11, 2012 at 9:58 PM

    Your heart had A great meaning!

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  11. SARAHMarch 26, 2012 at 2:24 PM

    aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaazzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzziiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnngggggggggggggggggggggggg, story! i love your conclusion, it was so meaningful it made my storylook horrible comepared to mine! AWESOME!

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  12. SARAHMarch 26, 2012 at 2:26 PM

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  13. MahmoudFebruary 18, 2013 at 5:02 PM

    i can't describe how i loved your conclusion i mean although they drive you nuts i'm astonished.

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  14. Anna C.February 18, 2013 at 5:55 PM

    Your story made me feel glad that I'm not old enough to babysit! AWESOME STORY!!

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  15. MaylinFebruary 18, 2013 at 9:30 PM

    I loved how you were thoughtful enough to babysit for your sister it really wrapped the story up and made the story meaningful .
    nice!!!!!

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  16. AshlynnFebruary 19, 2013 at 5:10 PM

    I love this story it was amazing

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  17. JulietteFebruary 19, 2013 at 5:11 PM

    I love your story

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  18. KatherineFebruary 19, 2013 at 7:08 PM

    I LOVED your conclusion !! It was awesome blossom ! You have terrific dialog!

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  19. collinFebruary 19, 2013 at 7:28 PM

    I loved how you wrote your conclusion!! It was awesome!!!!:)

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  20. NoeFebruary 21, 2013 at 10:44 AM

    I LOVED CONCLUSION!!!!!!!.

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  21. RayyaFebruary 21, 2013 at 7:57 PM

    I like you story because even know you're niece and nephew are a pain you were happy because you helped sister.I also like how you care for you're sister.

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